Entry # 9

Nowadays, we have the cell phone all time with us; for this reason is important that we can become aware of avoiding the use of this technological instrument when we are driving. Using a cell phone on the road can risk our life and the life of pedestrians because it affects the driver´s ability; as a consequence, there is an important relation between the use of cell phones while driving and fatal accidents. The laws that had been created to punish the offenders are not sufficient; for this reason as citizens we need to ask for strict laws that regulate the phone use to make our roads safer and to protect us from irresponsible drivers.

Entry # 8

                                              THE CHOICE OF IMMIGRATE

Many people decide to start a new life in a foreign country for different reasons. Firstly, the main reason for immigration is that many countries have economic problems as well as not stable jobs. Sometimes people decide to leave their family and travel alone, which is not easy. Secondly, other cause for moving to another land could be that dwellers do not feel safe in the place where they are living. Thirdly, generally when tourists spend a holiday time on a foreign region they fell in love with it and decide to start a new life there. To conclude, people have many different reasons to leave their homeland and start over their lives in another country.

Entry # 8

Immigration.

Many people decide to go to another country for different reasons, to try new opportunities. Firstly, the main reason for immigration is that many countries have economic problems as well as not stable jobs; so people have to go away to find a stable one. Sometimes people decide to leave their family and travel alone, which is not easy. Secondly, other reason of immigration could be that people do not feel safe in the place where they are living. Thirdly, generally when people spend a holiday time on a foreign country they fell in love with it and decide to start a new life there. To conclude, people have many reasons to immigrate but the decision of starting a new life in other country is not an easy one.

Entry # 7

                                                                    My paragraph
                                                                 IN MY COUNTRY.

In my country, you can visit many different landscapes; there is a good variety of sightseeing. For those people interested in the mountains, they can visit San Carlos de Bariloche which is located in Rio Negro, Argentina´s south. It would be a wonderful option to visit San Carlos de Bariloche in winter, when the mountains are covered by snow. It seems to be a wonderful white desert. For those who want a warmer weather, they can visit the Argentina´s north. It has a beautiful landscape and Argentina´s north is known for its red land. It is wonderful to see the place architecture. So, you need to decide what type of landscape you like most and visit it.

                                          My partner´s topic and conclusion sentence
                                                        IN MY COUNTRY.

In my country, landscapes in the south and the north are options to take into account depending on your likes. For those people interested in the mountains, they can visit San Carlos de Bariloche which is located in Rio Negro, Argentina´s south. It would be a wonderful option to visit San Carlos de Bariloche in winter, when the mountains are covered by snow. It seems to be a wonderful white desert. For those who want a warmer weather, they can visit the Argentina´s north. It has a beautiful landscape and Argentina´s north is known for its red land. It is wonderful to see the place architecture. In Argentina, what you have to do is to choose which landscape you wanted to visit to.

Analysis

Changing the topic sentence and the conclusion one does not vary the meaning of the paragraph. In my opinion my partner´s topic sentence is better than mine because in it is explained the differences between the north and the south but the conclusion sentences are similar. In both paragraphs there is no used of synonyms or antonyms. The elements mention in the topic sentence and in the conclusion one are mention in the paragraph.