My paragraph
IN MY COUNTRY.
IN MY COUNTRY.
In my country, you can visit many different landscapes; there is a good variety of sightseeing. For those people interested in the mountains, they can visit San Carlos de Bariloche which is located in Rio Negro, Argentina´s south. It would be a wonderful option to visit San Carlos de Bariloche in winter, when the mountains are covered by snow. It seems to be a wonderful white desert. For those who want a warmer weather, they can visit the Argentina´s north. It has a beautiful landscape and Argentina´s north is known for its red land. It is wonderful to see the place architecture. So, you need to decide what type of landscape you like most and visit it.
My partner´s topic and conclusion sentence
IN MY COUNTRY.
IN MY COUNTRY.
In my country, landscapes in the south and the north are options to take into account depending on your likes. For those people interested in the mountains, they can visit San Carlos de Bariloche which is located in Rio Negro, Argentina´s south. It would be a wonderful option to visit San Carlos de Bariloche in winter, when the mountains are covered by snow. It seems to be a wonderful white desert. For those who want a warmer weather, they can visit the Argentina´s north. It has a beautiful landscape and Argentina´s north is known for its red land. It is wonderful to see the place architecture. In Argentina, what you have to do is to choose which landscape you wanted to visit to.
Analysis
Changing the topic sentence and the conclusion one does not vary the meaning of the paragraph. In my opinion my partner´s topic sentence is better than mine because in it is explained the differences between the north and the south but the conclusion sentences are similar. In both paragraphs there is no used of synonyms or antonyms. The elements mention in the topic sentence and in the conclusion one are mention in the paragraph.
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